ROUGH CUT 5

Below are our changes made after receiving feedback on our fourth rough cut. 

- Isolated bells for the audio-bridge

- Changed linking words for all titles to a sans-serif font to highlight names

- Made titles less stretched out 

- Changed wording (title convention), shows main producer and co-producers, as well as removing "distributed by" as it's not conventional wording for titles

- Added foley sound for opening shots

- Merged both mine and Sasha's names in order to have one director credit

- Added a fade to the titles so they don't appear as suddenly

- Isolated titles and credits 

- Added forest foley sound and snapping 

- Removed ELS of Marion screaming at the tree (comic effect creating an oppositional reading)

- Kept phone ringing and changed audio levels 

- Removed burial scene 

- Added slo-mo on final screaming shot

- Added water drips and static to the main title

- Removed second written and directed credit (was meant to be added in initial titles)

- Removed "the next day" from locker scene

- Edited locker scene lighting 

Here is the written feedback we received from the other media students: 

- Opening bells are too loud

- Make hand of god foley sound quieter

- Linking words are still too large

- Fade Friday The 13th music

- Start the titles from the opening 

- Remove cigarette shot (verisimilitude broken as she breaks it)

- Makeup and costume should be separately credited

- Titles should be smaller

- Make sure all titles are identical (size, font, tracking, spacing)

- Slow running more

- Remake foley sound of footsteps 

- Turn down noises of the birds, sounds like the middle of the day

- Add more sounds to main title

- Add movement to main title

- Play scream over main title

- Cross-cut "Norman" screaming with burial scene shots

- Add a fade to black at the end